tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post7463760810179618056..comments2024-02-25T20:03:04.193+08:00Comments on Skythewood Translations: Altina the Sword Princess Volume 2 Chapter 2Skythewoodhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09822518075273221670noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-86656979207115410922016-04-07T13:20:47.922+08:002016-04-07T13:20:47.922+08:00Blood was flowing out of a large wound that went f...Blood was flowing out of a large wound that went from his buttocks to his right inner thigh. It was indeed a non-fatal wound.<br /><br />Ya, no way the femoral artery located on the inside of the thigh was cut causing him to blead out in a minut or two. Also any wound would disable such a large man would have to be, at the very least, be quite life threatening.<br /><br /><br />"You moron!!"<br /> <br />Bang!<br /> <br />"Shya!?"<br /><br />I would suggest something other than 'Bang', like Wham, Smack, or Pow, as 'Bang' could also represent the gun firing. Yes it's mentioned 2 lines later that the gun didn't fire, but the lack of ambiguity would be nice.AnonMKIInoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-23590677394747528932015-02-17T14:14:00.995+08:002015-02-17T14:14:00.995+08:00They should just kill the two and report that two ...They should just kill the two and report that two spies impersonating imperial inspectors delivered a fake set of orders that only a fool would believe were real, and were summarily dealt with ;)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-78812064753811212482015-01-07T05:45:56.904+08:002015-01-07T05:45:56.904+08:00eric is best girl confirmederic is best girl confirmedAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-37565141303731661162015-01-04T06:37:52.018+08:002015-01-04T06:37:52.018+08:00Thank you for the chapter.Thank you for the chapter.IngroTheChundyerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08892892679317547474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-12447666708950952342014-12-25T02:11:50.814+08:002014-12-25T02:11:50.814+08:00I also gave a tip on the Altina page (posted there...I also gave a tip on the Altina page (posted there by accident). Next time, I'll keep all of my edits to a single comment, so it's easier to read and keep track of. Made an account so that I don't have to appear as "Anonymous" every time. Looking forward to the next chapter!RavenSlitherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16974257331862410002noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-68682829923523746872014-12-24T23:57:50.005+08:002014-12-24T23:57:50.005+08:00I really like this kind of LN. Strategy and politi...I really like this kind of LN. Strategy and politics.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06356188086027197245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-88903932409057489332014-12-24T15:08:07.200+08:002014-12-24T15:08:07.200+08:00Please let Eric be a trap. I don't want to dea...Please let Eric be a trap. I don't want to deal with any Shounen ai.<br />Also, thank you very much for the chapter, Sky. Looking forward to the next one.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-92167257746599805482014-12-24T12:51:05.844+08:002014-12-24T12:51:05.844+08:00Thanks for the translation! Things are getting mor...Thanks for the translation! Things are getting more and more interesting..which is how it should be, yet isn't the case with way too many LNs.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-47481246604247683762014-12-24T07:22:52.244+08:002014-12-24T07:22:52.244+08:00Thanks, amended.Thanks, amended.Skythewoodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09822518075273221670noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-88177685146776710592014-12-24T07:22:35.255+08:002014-12-24T07:22:35.255+08:00Thanks, amendedThanks, amendedSkythewoodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09822518075273221670noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-45349820373927606902014-12-24T07:22:13.965+08:002014-12-24T07:22:13.965+08:00Thanks, amended.Thanks, amended.Skythewoodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09822518075273221670noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-2497726162657428442014-12-24T06:25:02.306+08:002014-12-24T06:25:02.306+08:00no use you know, he had no money so he pawn his sw...no use you know, he had no money so he pawn his sword,<br />he can always sell something else to have books.<br />and thanks sky for the releaseAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-56000315323049323782014-12-24T05:25:08.924+08:002014-12-24T05:25:08.924+08:00Regis is terrible with money, he needs someone to ...Regis is terrible with money, he needs someone to hold the purse strings for his salary.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-75990759951996205132014-12-24T03:58:01.127+08:002014-12-24T03:58:01.127+08:00Thanks Wong!Thanks Wong!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-69689883620343881232014-12-24T02:15:21.666+08:002014-12-24T02:15:21.666+08:00"Due to Jerome's situation and personalit..."Due to Jerome's situation and personality, even if he knew Altina had the intention to revolt, he would not sell her out. Regis did thought this will happen..."<br /><br />Change to: Regis thought this would happen...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-39608836582928762362014-12-24T02:11:10.266+08:002014-12-24T02:11:10.266+08:00"My apologies... But proposing a deal is a wa..."My apologies... But proposing a deal is a way of buying time. Man will lose their cool when an opportunity presents itself. For example, when you had to kill 3 people and one of them charge at you first. A charming proposal might be bait for a trap... It is normal to be confused, it's a decision that will decide the future of your life... Well, someone will come if I drag for time."<br /><br />Change "Man" to "men" or if you want it to be singular, change "Man" to "A man".Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-59440364068735358262014-12-24T02:00:31.579+08:002014-12-24T02:00:31.579+08:00Oh, sorry. "Chris S" pointed out a lot o...Oh, sorry. "Chris S" pointed out a lot of good edits already...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-39448144151574389622014-12-24T01:59:35.121+08:002014-12-24T01:59:35.121+08:00"Although paper making techniques were quite ..."Although paper making techniques were quite advance, the bookbinding skills were less developed."<br /><br />Add a "d" to "advance" to change it to "advanced" (past tense).Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-11692130626275026582014-12-24T01:59:26.709+08:002014-12-24T01:59:26.709+08:00thanks for the chapter ^^ Can't wait to see ho...thanks for the chapter ^^ Can't wait to see how they would take down the fort, expecting some ninja stealth or acting to happen. <br />and just some suggestions for improvement. <br /><br />Although paper making techniques were quite advance > 'advance' to 'advanced'<br /><br />So the shopkeeper was fine with me putting me on his tab." > sounds weird, remove the first me? or reword?<br /><br />She can wield that heavy sword with one head, > 'head' to 'hand'<br /><br />"I see. The princess is not someone without status can talk to easily. > reword. ...not someone those without...<br /><br />He pulled Clarisse by the hand, running through the gaps of the tables and head for the door. > add '-ed' or '-ing' behind the 'head'<br /><br />Suddenly, Clarisse grab Regis' hand with both of her hands. >grab to grabbed<br /><br />Becker's eyes we're bloodshot > we're to were<br /><br />He stand a chance if this was an open plain > stand to stood or add a 'would' after he.<br /><br /> there will be a way if they defend the first bullet > reword. ... if they (could) defend (against) the...<br /><br />you will see my proposal is a better solution. > ... see (that) my ...<br /><br />there we're similar incidents like this. > change 'we're' to 'were'<br /><br />Just when his hands that was raised were tiring. > sounds awkward. reword. ...that (were) raised ...<br /><br />Even Eric didn't came back > came to come<br /><br />Regis did thought this will happen... > thought to think<br /><br />He displayed his researched on the long table. > remove the '-ed' on researched<br /><br />I believe the Regis who utilized his intelligence together with me." > sounds awkward...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05020861566682464569noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-90684353606508650802014-12-24T01:31:10.551+08:002014-12-24T01:31:10.551+08:00woow, thankswoow, thanksAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-13181670370635378792014-12-24T01:20:06.164+08:002014-12-24T01:20:06.164+08:00Godlike! Thank you so much!Godlike! Thank you so much!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16308447436731521148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-69561065405286102622014-12-24T00:20:27.670+08:002014-12-24T00:20:27.670+08:00WooHoo..
Praise be to Skythewood and death to Beck...WooHoo..<br />Praise be to Skythewood and death to Becker and Boislow.Anayse_thisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-75950089917537102252014-12-24T00:16:48.524+08:002014-12-24T00:16:48.524+08:00Thank you for another chapter! :DThank you for another chapter! :DAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-40983010481964528872014-12-23T21:29:54.844+08:002014-12-23T21:29:54.844+08:00Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4225665848364118863.post-34392655553072602802014-12-23T20:44:37.945+08:002014-12-23T20:44:37.945+08:00Busy tomorrow, so early release.Busy tomorrow, so early release.Skythewoodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09822518075273221670noreply@blogger.com